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Some people believe that playing sport is important, whereas, others think it’s just a leisure activity for some people. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion also.

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Some think that sport is crucial for people to stay healthy,
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 others believe that it is not for everyone and might be used as an activity in their free time. I agree with those thinking about working out regularly.
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, our body as the same as our brain needs to be trained. Despite situations when individuals are deprived of playing sports, the majority of
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 still have to stay active to support their body parts so that they can move without any pain longer.
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, doing workouts regularly helps us to improve our immune system in order to fight against bacteria more successfully.
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, if being healthy is not the priority of some communities, it might be unnecessary to play
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, there are some professions that do not even need physical work, like programmers or counters. For them, being physically active may be seen reluctantly. In my opinion, those people who think that they don't have to train will have bad consequences in the future, when their back will hurt and pain in their arms or legs will not leave them for a long time. We will not be able to feel free to run after a bus without hard breath or something like that. So first opinion might be right for people who have excuses, but human still needs to support themselves and their bodies.

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Consider providing a clearer thesis statement in your introduction that outlines both views and your opinion more explicitly.
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Ensure that your paragraphs are well-organized, each focusing on one main idea, to improve clarity and flow.
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Include specific examples or scenarios to support your arguments better, which would make your ideas more relevant and comprehensive.
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Make sure to have a strong conclusion that summarizes your main points and reinforces your opinion.
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You demonstrate a good understanding of the topic and present both sides of the argument.
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Your ideas have some logical connections and show an attempt to support your opinion with reasoning.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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