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the chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph displays the
households
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'
number
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 in the United States
according to
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 their yearly
income
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 in 2017 and 2015.
Overall
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, all the
households
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' yearly
income
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 increased over the period except for those whose
income
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 ranged between
seventy fife
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seventy-five
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 and
ninty
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ninety
thousands
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thousand
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 remained relatively stable. Most
of
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households
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'
income
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 went up in 2011 and 2015. The US
households
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 whose
income
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 is less than 25,000
million
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 dollars began the time at 25 in 2007 and grew dramatically to nearly 28
million
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 in 2011 before its slight decline to approximately 27 in 2015. People whose money ranged between 25,000 to 49,000
millions
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million
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 started
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time at nearly 27 and rose to 30 in 2011 before it decreased slightly to nearly 28 in 2015. The
households
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number
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 who had 50,000
million
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as
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their
income
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were
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at
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nearly 22 in 2007 and remained nearly the same in 2011 and 2017. Those whose money ranged between 75,000 and 99,000
million
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 dollars began at approximately 14 as the lowest in
number
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 among all. Individuals who had 100,000
million
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 or more started as the highest in 2007 at nearly 29 and
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 as the highest in
number
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 among all at approximately 34 in 2015.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, number, income, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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