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Scientists say that junk food is harmful to people’s health. Some say the way ask people to leas fast food is educate them.while others say education doesn’t work.discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Scientists have long warned about the negative health effects of
junk
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food
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, leading to a heated debate on how best to address
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 issue.  On one side, proponents of
education
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 argue that informing people about the dangers of fast
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 can lead to healthier choices. They believe that by providing information about nutrition, the risks associated with excessive consumption of
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food
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, and the benefits of a balanced diet, individuals will be motivated to change their eating habits. Educational campaigns in schools and communities can raise awareness about the importance of healthy eating and encourage people to make better
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 choices.
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, others argue that
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 alone is insufficient to combat the prevalence of fast
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 in society. They contend that many individuals are already aware of the health risks associated with
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food
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 but continue to consume it
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 convenience, taste, and marketing influences. Fast
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 is often more accessible and affordable than healthier options, making it difficult for people to resist. Critics of purely educational approaches suggest that structural changes,
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 as improving access to healthy foods and implementing regulations on
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food
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 advertising, are necessary to effect real change. In my opinion,
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education
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 is an important step in promoting healthier eating habits, it is not enough on its own. A multifaceted approach that includes
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,
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 improved access to healthy
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 options, and regulations on fast
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 marketing
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 essential to effectively reduce the consumption of
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food
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 and improve public health.

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Consider adding more specific examples or data to support your arguments, such as statistics or case studies related to the effectiveness of educational programs on eating habits.
coherence and cohesion
Work on linking your ideas more smoothly for better flow, particularly between points about education and structural changes.
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The essay presents a balanced discussion of the topic, addressing both sides of the debate effectively.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction clearly lays out the issue at hand and the conclusion summarizes your opinion nicely, providing closure to the essay.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • junk food
  • harmful effects
  • health issues
  • obesity
  • heart disease
  • diabetes
  • educational campaigns
  • healthy eating habits
  • marketing influence
  • convenience food
  • government regulations
  • taxes on unhealthy foods
  • personal responsibility
  • food choices
  • lifestyle changes
  • nutritional education
  • public health initiatives
  • fast-food consumption
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