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The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the features, and make comarisons where relevant . Ainazym

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the features, and make comarisons where relevant . Ainazym
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The graph demonstrates the proportion of individuals who were living in four Asian countries,
such
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 as
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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,
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Indonesia
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and Indonesia
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 from 1970 to 2020,
also
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 provides the probability number of people for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, the largest proportion of citizens preferred to live in
Malaysia
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, demonstrating the highest urban population percentage, meanwhile
Thailand
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 had the lowest. Over time, all four countries indicated an increasing trend in urbanization, with notable shifts in growth rate. In 1970,
generally
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Malaysia
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 had the largest urban population, showing around 30%,
while
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 the
Philippines
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 was slightly behind.
Furthermore
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,
Indonesia
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 and
Thailand
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 had much lower percentages, approximately between 10% and 20%. Over the years, urbanisation moved upward steadily in all four countries,
however
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,
Malaysia
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 and
Indonesia
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 illustrated the highest increasing rates and experienced the fastest growth. By 2020,
population
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the population
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 of
Malaysia
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 reached nearly 80%,
while
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and
Indonesia
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 stood about at 55%-60%.
Thailand
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 provided the least urbanisation, with just over 40%, but scientists suggest continued growth
for
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of
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 50% in 2040.
Malaysia
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 will lead the rate, rising even over 90%,
while
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and
Indonesia
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 will reach 60%-65% by 2040.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words philippines, malaysia, thailand, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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