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The graph shows Internet Usage in Taiwan by Age Group, 1998-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows Internet Usage in Taiwan by Age Group, 1998-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the percentages of using the
Internet
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 in Taiwan by four different ages less than 15, 15-30
years
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 , 31 to 50
years
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 ,and 50 or more from 1998 to 2000.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
people
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 who are from 16-30 and 31 to 50
years
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 were both of them during the whole period of
years
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 witnessed a slight decrease in using the
internet
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,
while
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 the ages from less than 15 and 50 or more saw increased in using the
internet
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 during the whole period of
years
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.
To begin
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 with, those
people
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 who are from 16-30 and 31 to 50
years
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 experienced an increase in searching on the
Internet
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 in 1998 starting at 53% and 41% respectively and ending at 44% and 37% respectively in 2000.
In contrast
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,
people
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 who are less than 15 and 50 or more rose steadily in using the
Internet
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stood
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 at 2% in 1998 and for those
people
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 who are from 50 or more was doubled to 4% and ended with almost the same proportion 9% and 10% respectively in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, years, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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