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The given graph shows the main sources of energy for USA in 1980 and 1990

The given graph shows the main sources of energy for USA in 1980 and 1990
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The pie charts compare the
percentage
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 of
energy
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 produced from five different sources in the USA between 1980 and 1990.
It is clear that
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, the highest
percentage
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 of
energy
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 produced from oil in the USA over the 10-year
period
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.
By contrast
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, hydroelectric and nuclear
power
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 were the lowest
energy
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 sources from 1980 to 1990. In 1980,
energy
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 production from oil was 42%, and
this
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 figure decreased to 33% in 1990. Between 1980 and 1990, the
percentage
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from
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 neutral gas decreased from 26% to 25%, a fall of 1% over the
period
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. The remaining popular sources of
energy
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 in the USA were coal, hydroelectric
power
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 and nuclear
power
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 during the
period
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 of 1980 to 1990. Over
this
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period
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, there was an increase in the
percentage
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 of
energy
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 generated from coal and nuclear
power
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 from 22% and 5% to 27% and 10%, respectively. Hydroelectric
power
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,
on the other hand
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, was the only source of
energy
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 which remained stable at 5% over the
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, energy, period, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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