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Band 4

Some people say that shops should sell food products that are made in the local area whenever possible rather than foods that are imported from other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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In today's world, the shift from selling local
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 to imported
food
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 often sparks debate. Many contend that vendors should give priority to their native
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instead
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 of foreign
food
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. I partially agree with
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 notion as it offers numerous benefits.
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 with, there is a vast range of advantages associated with marketing exotic
food
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. First of all, there will be significant growth in one's economy as they have to import less
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 from other nations.
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, it will encourage local farmers to produce more.
Secondly
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, people will get fresh and quality products. When we import bread from other countries it
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much more time and they pack items in plastic bags which is not beneficial for our health and environment.
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, statistics revealed that 'imports of China have significantly decreased by 48% by 2024 as they prioritized their domestic products'.
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, the benefits of foreign
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 cannot be overlooked. People can enjoy a variety of items from international
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.
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, Canada heavily relies on the United States for pineapple as that cannot be grown in Canada as it requires a temperature above 50 degrees. In conclusion, both native and non-native cooking has its own importance. Sellers should give priority to their native
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 so
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 cannot be affected and
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help
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 in growing our economy.

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task achievement
While your essay presents a balanced view, it would benefit from a clearer stance in the introduction. Consider explicitly stating whether you mostly agree or disagree with the viewpoint.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly supports the main argument. Adding clearer connections between ideas would enhance coherence and logical flow.
task achievement
Your examples are relevant, but try to expand them with more detail or explanation to strengthen your points and provide a deeper understanding for the reader.
content
You provided a balanced perspective by acknowledging both local and imported foods, which shows critical thinking.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • local economy
  • support local farmers
  • economic growth
  • freshness
  • nutritional value
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable
  • cultural significance
  • diverse market
  • seasonal offerings
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