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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The graph illustrates the proportion of bodies who live in
towns
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 from four different countries .Namely, the Philippines ,Malaysia,Thailand,and Indonesia between 1970 and 2020 with a forecast to 2040 .
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, the population from Malaysia prefer to live in cities and it has the highest percentage of the population who lives in
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 out of the other three countries . With regard to the percentage of folk who choose to live in urban areas that stood at under 20% of the total population . Back in 1970, Indonesia started with the lowest percentage of
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nation
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 who selected to have their houses in
towns
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 about 12% of Indonesian individuals live in
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 ,it will experience significant growth with 60% in 2040 and will be in the second rank of the highest number of families who live in urban areas.Thailand was the third country whose residents favour spending their life in cities but it seems that in the future the proportion of Thai citizens living in
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 will increase rapidly until it reaches 50% in 2040. Turning to the greatest two countries proportion that their residents like to build their homes in cities back in 1970.The Philippines stood at approximately 31% of their citizens live in urban areas and as
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shown in the graph the rate of the Philippines community will see a great change in the future .In 2040 Malaysia will be the highest country in society living in
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Vocabulary: Replace the words towns with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • percentage
  • population
  • predictions
  • historical trends
  • rate of increase/decrease
  • compare/contrast
  • factors
  • influences
  • implications
  • economic development
  • government policies
  • urban growth
  • migration
  • demographic changes
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