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The line graph compares the proportion of the population of 4 different countries in Asia living in cities between 1970 and 2020, with projection to 2040.

The line graph compares the proportion of the population of 4 different countries in Asia living in cities between 1970 and 2020, with projection to 2040.
The graph illustrates the proportion of
people
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 who live in
towns
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 from four different countries .Namely, the Philippines ,Malaysia,Thailand,and Indonesia between 1970 and 2020 with
forecast
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 to 2040 .
Overall
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,
people
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 from Malaysia prefer to live in cities and it
will
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has the highest
percentage
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 of the population who lives in
towns
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 out of the other three countries . With regard to the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who choose to live in urban areas that stood at under 20% of the total population . Back in
1970
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1970,
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 Indonesia started with the lowest
percentage
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 of
people
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 who selected to have their houses in
towns
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 about 12% of Indonesian individuals live in
towns
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 .
Subsequently
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 ,it will experience significant growth with 60% in 2040 and will be in the second rank of the highest
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people
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number of people
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 who
lives
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live
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 in urban areas.Thailand was the third country whose
residence
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residents
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 favour
to spent
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spending
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 their life in cities but it
seem
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seems
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 that in the future the proportion of Thai citizens living in
towns
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 will increase rapidly until it reaches 50% in 2040. Turning to the greatest two countries
proprotion
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proportion
 that their
residences
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residents
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 like to build their homes in cities back in 1970.The Philippines stood at approximately 31% of their citizens
who
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apply
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lives
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live
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 in urban areas and
it
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apply
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shows
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shown
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 in the graph the
percentage
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 of Philippines
people
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 will
saw
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see
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 a great change in the future .In 2040 Malaysia will be the highest country that
it
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in
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people
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's living in
towns
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 .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, towns, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • population
  • countries
  • cities
  • between
  • compare
  • living
  • increase
  • decrease
  • period
  • trends
  • significant
  • changes
  • interesting
  • patterns
  • urbanization
  • overall
  • summarize
  • reflecting
  • future
  • projections
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