The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. Describe the information presented below. Comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. Describe the information presented below. Comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.
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represent
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represents
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the
avarage
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average
amount
for
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of
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people
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work
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who work
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every week with
number
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a number
the number
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of
hours
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work
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worked
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unpaid by different categories. The data shows about the
maried
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married
men and
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womens
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women
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who are with
kids
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and without
kids
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.
Overall
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the main three categories are men and
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womens
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women
women's
firstly
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without children,
secondly
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with 1-2
child
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children
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,
third
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and third
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with 3+
childrens
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children
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. In that least amount of
work
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done by people who
does
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do
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not have
kids
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in
that
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apply
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womens
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women
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do more
work
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as compared to
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mens
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men
men's
where as with 3+
kids
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mens
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men
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have
lowest
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the lowest
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amount of
hours
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work
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of work
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done unpaid.
Allthough
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Although
,
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the higest
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higest
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highest
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work load
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workload
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is with 3+
childrens
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children's
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parents in that
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womens
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women
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do approx 60
hours
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of extra
work
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in one whole week
whereas
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,
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mens
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men
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do only 15
hours
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of extra
work
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which
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not even half
ladies
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of ladies
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. Now, parents with 1-2
kids
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in their case
also
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womens
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women's
women
work
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simillarly
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similarly
approx 50
hours
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of extra with that
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mens
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men
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are
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are also fallen
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also
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fall in same 15-20
hours
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of extra
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work load
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workload
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, parents without
kids
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does
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do
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not have that much of
responsiblity
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responsibility
so they have
less
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fewer
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hours
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as
compare
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compared
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to
other
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others
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both.
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womens
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women
women's
work
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30
hours
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extra half from
other
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the other
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2. Shockingly
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mens
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men
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do more
work
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and being active in
this
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one
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work
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works
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approx
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approximately
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20
hours
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and
little
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a little
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more.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words work, hours, womens, kids, mens with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unpaid work
  • Household chores
  • Gender roles
  • Disparity
  • Societal expectations
  • Cultural norms
  • Full-time housewives
  • Part-time jobs
  • Traditional responsibilities
  • Domestic roles
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