Some people believe that parents should limit their children hours of watching tv and playing computer games, but encourage to read books. Do you agree or disagree

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Some individuals suggest that parents need to restrict the time that their offspring spend

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watching TV and playing computer

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they should motivate them to read more. I agree with

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the fact that modern children are suffering from a short attention span and a lack of imagination. Reading, indeed, may help them to tackle these issues. Children these days have serious

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with their concentration and I strongly believe that it is

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the fact that they do not read books but spend so much time consuming fast-paced information

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as TV and computer games. Reading books requires a lot of focus and would only benefit children.

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conclusion

Consider providing a clearer conclusion that summarizes your main points and reinforces your opinion.

supporting detail

Expand on your ideas with more specific examples or scenarios that illustrate the benefits of reading over screen time.

coherence

Ensure that all your ideas are connected logically in your paragraphs, using cohesive devices where necessary.

clarity

Your essay presents a clear opinion that is easy to understand.

introduction

The introduction introduces the topic effectively, setting a strong foundation for your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

115 words

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Some people believe that parents should limit their children hours of watching tv and playing computer games, but encourage to read books. Do you agree or disagree

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many people say that cooking and eating at home is better for the individual and the family than eating out in restaurants. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that mobile phone conversations should be banned in crowded and social places, while others argue it is okay to be allowed. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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