The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of individuals who went to cinemas in Europe
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on various days in 2003, 2005, and 2007.
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, the graph clearly shows that over these periods the most chosen day by people to visit the cinema was Saturday,
whereas
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Monday was the
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day that cinema had
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. Regarding the days that had the highest number of
visitors
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to the cinemas, Saturdays ranked in
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first place, as the percentages of
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were 45% in 2005, nearly 43% in 2007 and 40% in 2003. The
second ranked
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day was Sunday, as the average rate of people
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to cinema was approximately 33%, followed by Friday as the ratio of
visitors
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was 30% throughout those three years.
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, the days that received the lowest percentages of
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were Mondays, with almost 14%, which was the highest percentage in 2005,
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Wednesday, with 16% in 2003.

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