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You bought a set of speakers from a store recently and discovered that they were not working properly. Write a letter to the store. In your letter, describe the problem with the speakers describe what happened when you returned them to the store explain what action you require

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you I encountered with a set of speakers I purchased from your store. The speakers, which I bought on January 30th. It was not functioning properly. Despite following the setup all instructions carefully. There was no sound output when connected to my device. The audio quality was very poor when it did produce sound. I returned to your store on February 2nd to report the problem. Unfortunately, the staff was unable to resolve the issue and he suggested that I wait
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 I have still not received any
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 a solution. Given
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, I kindly request
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a full refund or replacement for
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 speakers. I believe
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 resolution. Considering it is still under
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 and those were defective upon purchase. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Akbar Surya

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure to use correct conjunctions and transitions to enhance the flow of your letter.
task achievement
Check for grammatical errors and clarity in conveying your message, particularly in the description of the problem and the request for action.
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Your letter has a clear purpose and provides necessary details about the situation.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately formal, which suits the context of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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