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You are a student at an English language school in Brighton and are living in private accommodation with other flat mates. You have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success.

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Dear Mr. Jones, I am one of the tenants at your property in Upper Lewes Road
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 and am writing to complain about the fact that we do not have any hot water or heating in our
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. As you know, we have been living in
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house
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 since September and have always paid our rent on time.
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, we have had no hot water for the
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 two weeks.
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 is making our lives very difficult, especially as it is now the middle of winter.
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 week you said you would send a workman to our
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 within 3 days, but no one came. After calling many times, the workman eventually arrived at the
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 5 days later. Unfortunately, he said he could not fix the problem because the boiler was too old! We are now extremely unhappy about
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 solution. We are prepared to continue to rent your
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 but please arrange for emergency repairs to be made. We
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 request a 40% discount on our rent for the period we have been without any hot water or heating. We look forward to hearing from you.  Shannon Brown

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Consider providing more specific examples of how the lack of hot water and heating has affected your daily life. This would strengthen your argument for the repairs and the compensation request.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that all your requests are clearly separated and highlighted, perhaps by using bullet points or numbering them. This will help with the logical structure of your complaint.
positive
The tone of your letter is appropriately formal and polite, which is excellent for a complaint to a landlord.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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