People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently.To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, many people are starting work earlier and staying in their jobs for
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, there is an ongoing debate if keeping the same
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leads to a more satisfying
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compared to those
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change careers frequently. From my point of view, I strongly disagree with
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perspective because having the same
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for
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will be boring and they will
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promoted or have a better salary. First of all, it is common for individuals to feel bored if they were to do a task repetitively.
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, many of them will feel less motivated as they may not acquire any new knowledge if they were to stay in the same company for
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, when employees have been working under the same conditions and boss for over ten
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, they are less enthusiastic about their
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and,
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less productive.
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is why I believe that changing careers receive a better
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satisfaction.
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, I believe that there
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no career progression in some jobs. In
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case, it is more beneficial for professionals to change companies to increase their chances to be promoted or to get
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better pay.
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, in some jobs, they will only promote people if their employees with a higher position resign.
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of waiting
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for a promotion, they could apply for a
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with a higher position. In conclusion, I firmly disagree with
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viewpoint as changing companies make the individuals' working life more enjoyable as they may get sick of the repetitiveness of their
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and it can
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lead to professional growth with an increase
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career path
  • job satisfaction
  • professional goals
  • climb the career ladder
  • develop expertise
  • long-term commitment
  • financial security
  • varied experiences
  • prevent monotony
  • job security
  • career progression
  • personal preferences
  • industry dynamics
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