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It is also possible to say that when people comes to area of tourism and find it organized certainly they will follow the rules. Moreover, adding signs and charts that directs tourist how to respect the area they are in. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to this question. On balance, however, I tend to believe that sufficient efforts must be given to maintain strict rules for tourist to respect areas of tourism and prevent devastation.

It is also possible to say that when people comes to area of tourism and find it organized certainly they will follow the rules. Moreover, adding signs and charts that directs tourist how to respect the area they are in. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to this question. On balance, however, I tend to believe that sufficient efforts must be given to maintain strict rules for tourist to respect areas of tourism and prevent devastation.
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There is no denying the fact that international
tourism
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 brought enormous
benifit
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benefit
benefits
 to many places.
while
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 it is a commonly held belief that
tourism
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 is
great
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 source of high income, there is
also
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 an argument that concerns
about
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apply
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the impact of
tourism
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 on local inhabitants and the
enviroment
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environment
.
this
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 essay will analyze
this
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tops
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topic
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 from both points of
views
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view
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 and express my opinion. On one hand,
tourism
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 is one of the main sources of income in many countries, representing the
country
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country's
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 culture and providing tourists with joy
as well as
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 new experiences to make memories .
In other words
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, many countries
it's
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its
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economy
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economies
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 depends mainly on
tourism
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for example
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 Maldives and Mauritius.
In addition
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, developing
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tourism
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tourist
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 areas is very important as travellers look for countries that
has
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have
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 joyful
tourism
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experience
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experiences
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.
On the other hand
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, maintaining organized tourist areas and creating strict rules that
redicts
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predicts
redirects
 the disorganizers
..
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.
...
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 It is
also
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 possible to say that when people
comes
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come
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 to
area
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an area
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 of
tourism
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 and find it organized certainly they will follow the rules.
Moreover
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, adding signs and charts that directs
tourist
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tourists
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how
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on how
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 to respect the area they are in. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
this
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 question. On balance,
however
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, I tend to believe that sufficient efforts must be given to maintain strict rules for
tourist
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tourists
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 to respect areas of
tourism
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 and prevent devastation.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourism with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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