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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

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In the coming years,
people
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 will abandon purchasing newspapers or
books
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book
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 materials because of
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technological
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technology
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 development
instead
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of
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apply
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that
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apply
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, they will read the news or search
about
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for
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 information online without the need for payment.
This
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 essay strongly agrees with the statement because the
technology
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 enhancement will make easy and fast access to data and
people
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 will rely more on online sources and no need to pay is a plus. In the current time,
people
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 rely only on newspapers and books to know what is happening and seek knowledge because
this
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 is only the choice they have.
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, in the future, there will be a shift and old ways will not be appropriate. Thanks to scientists and the improvement of
technology
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people
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 will be able to find news and materials online by using their phones or computers.
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, students may find books and do research online which will be easier and faster than the old ways. Another benefit I should mention is governments will establish websites for national news so citizens can
rely
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rely on
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 and be confident about the truth of the information they just read.
Technology
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 can provide plenty of educational, cultural, and historical materials
as a result
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 it will be easy to access for everyone and for free. For these reasons,
people
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 are going to take advantage of
this
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 growth in the future. In conclusion, printed newspapers and journals are going to be less efficient and convenient for
people
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 to use.
On the other hand
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, applications and online sources are much greater and free to everyone.

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structure
The introduction could more clearly outline the main points that will be discussed in the essay. Consider summarizing these points to provide a roadmap for the reader.
content
Ensure all points are fully developed with more examples or explanations to reach a deeper understanding.
language
Work on varying your vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance engagement and clarity.
content
The essay presents a clear opinion and maintains focus on that opinion throughout.
examples
The use of examples like students finding research online effectively supports your points.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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