Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, picture, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Dear Seller I writing to you

for

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about

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the

red long

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apply

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sleeves

shirt

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I bought

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your shop in the

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sanko park mall

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Sanko Park Mall

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last

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week I

want

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won't

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inform

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you about

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shirts issues

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shirt issue

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While ı was

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When I

saw

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shirt

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from your shop ı liked

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much and ı bought

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ı wore one time when ı wore

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had not

any problem until wash to washing machine ı washed the

shirt

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to 60’ degree sensitive program When after ı washed the

shirt

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it was torn and

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been shattered and its

color

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was so fade I used my washing machine for my other clothes but has not been any torn or fading

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problem is not about my washing machine And ı think

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is not about to degree and program I

dont

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don't

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happend

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happened

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priceses

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prices

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brands

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clothes

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replacment

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replacement

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if your will

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replacement

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so much I look forward to your response Kind regards

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coherence and cohesion

Improve the organization of your letter by clearly structuring paragraphs for each main point. Consider beginning with a clear introduction, followed by the problem description, washing details, and your request for replacement.

task achievement

Use more formal language and correct grammar to improve clarity. For example, phrases like 'I writing' should be corrected to 'I am writing'.

task achievement

Provide more specific details about your washing machine settings and what you used to wash the shirt to strengthen your argument about the issue not being your washing machine's fault.

task achievement

You express your sentiment about the shirt clearly and show your disappointment, which helps convey your feelings on the matter.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

166 words

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Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, picture, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people believe that the arts (such as music, literature, and theater) are more important than other subjects in schools. Do you agree or disagree?

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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole.Do you agree or disagree?