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The maps below show changes in the town of Hillingford between 2000 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.

The maps below show changes in the town of Hillingford between 2000 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.
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The
maps
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 provide information about
change
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the change
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 in the city of
Hillingford
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Wallingford
 during five years from 2000 to 2015.
Overall
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, the
maps
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illustrates
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 a significant change and development between the past of
town
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the town
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 and the present of
city
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the city
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. It
is
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can be seen that the biggest
changes
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change
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 was in the West .
While
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 in the south there was unchanged. Generally speaking, in 2000, in the North-West we can saw
counter
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 house was replaced
to
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hotel
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the hotel
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 in 2015.
In addition
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, In the West
maps
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 in
2000
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2000,
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 the green
environments
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environment
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 was knocked down to
building
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build
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 a lot of facilities like tennis
court
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courts
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,
playground
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playgrounds
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,
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and apartments.
However
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, in the middle
maps
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 of Hillingford in 200 there was a market where it expanded to supermarkets in the year 2015,
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Furthermore
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 the area under supermarkets was altered to
bar
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a bar
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 and breakfast .
New
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The new
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 building was
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a
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train station in the present of Hillingford. It is noticeable that the school was
the
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still the same place .puls in the South the region
was remained
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remained
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 unchanged.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words maps with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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