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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table
give
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gives
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 information
how
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on how
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 the jobless people in
UK
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the UK
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 spent their
time
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 over the past year.
Overall
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, both men and women
tends
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tend
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 to
utilized
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utilise
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 their
time
Use synonyms
 with various activities rather than just meaningless
action
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actions
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,
such
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 as staying in bed and doing nothing. The data shows most women like to do their activity in the morning. Almost half of them spent their morning
do
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doing
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 housework. The other half do
variety
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a variety
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 of chores like shopping, job hunting, and visiting friends. There are less than a quarter who do their activities in
afternoon
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the afternoon
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.
On the other hand
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, men
has
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have
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 been evenly divided when it comes to the
time
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 they do their chores. Some of them like to do activities in the morning and some in the afternoon. A significant percentage of them like to
spent
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spend
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 their
time
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 doing housework, shopping, job hunting and visiting friends. A
less
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smaller
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 percentage spent their
time
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 in other
activity
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activities
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 like gardening, decorating,
walking
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and walking
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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