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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Comparison between the current building and the 2020 building of the college

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The map compares
Correct article usage
the facilites
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facilites
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facilities
 of
college
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the college
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 between present and
future
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building
Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
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 in 2020.
Overall
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, as can be seen, in
future
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 will be the highest carpark
speas
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space
.
while
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 the reception
turn
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turns
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 to Smallest.
Morever
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Moreover
, in
future
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will
Correct pronoun usage
there will
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 be
shop
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a shop
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 corner. And a few
chaning
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changes
 in reception and library.
It is clear that
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, in 2020, it is expected parking turn to bigger than present.
In addition
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,
entrest
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the entrest
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of
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in
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building
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the building
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 will
chang
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change
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 to
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the soulth
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soulth
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south
 side. As we as
,
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apply
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 the reception will pout in the middle side.
Morever
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Moreover
, they
whill
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will
 be increased in
number
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a number
the number
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 of
classroom
Change to a plural noun
classrooms
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 from 3 to 4.
Furthermore
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, the toilet Chang to
opposit
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opposite
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lacation
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location
lactation
 on
north
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the north
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.
Finally
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,
Lunch
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the Lunch
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 area will converted from the
comer
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corner
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 to
left
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the left
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 side as we as
Library
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the Library
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.
On the other hand
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, in the
future
Use synonyms
 expected will be
shop
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a shop
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 on the corner between
Lunch
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the Lunch
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 area and
toilet
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the toilet
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.
Additionally
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,
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the Footpath
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Footpath
Fix the agreement mistake
Footpaths
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 and gardesin in
the
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apply
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2020, will removed.
Finally
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,
bus
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the bus
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 stop and road will be same location without
remove
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removal
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 or
replaced
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replacement
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to include a clear introduction that outlines what the map is about and a conclusion that summarizes the main points of comparison. This structure will help in presenting your ideas more logically.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that transitions between sentences and paragraphs are smoother to improve the overall flow of the essay. Using linking words can help connect your ideas better.
task achievement
Be mindful of grammar and spelling errors. For instance, 'speas' should be 'spaces,' 'pout' needs to be 'put,' and 'whill' should be 'will.' Correcting these will enhance the readability of your writing.
task achievement
Add more specific details to strengthen your comparisons. For instance, mention the exact sizes or features of the facilities to provide a clearer picture.
task achievement
You provided a comparison between the current building and the 2020 building, which is relevant to the task.
task achievement
Some of your ideas show an understanding of the changes expected in the future building, which demonstrates good engagement with the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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