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The graph below shows consumers' average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows consumers' average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the average annual
expenditure
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 of American consumers on
cell
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phone
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services
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, national
fixed-line
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services
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, and international
fixed-line
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services
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 between 2001 and 2010.
Overall
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, spending on
cell
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phone
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services
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 saw a significant increase over the period,
while
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expenditure
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 on national
fixed-line
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services
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 steadily declined. Meanwhile, spending on international
fixed-line
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services
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 remained relatively stable with a slight upward trend. In 2001, the highest
expenditure
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 was on national
fixed-line
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services
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, at approximately $700 per year.
However
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,
this
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 figure consistently decreased over the years, reaching around $400 by 2010.
In contrast
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,
cell
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phone
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expenditure
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 started at about $200 in 2001, but experienced rapid growth, surpassing national
fixed-line
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services
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 around 2006, and eventually reaching nearly $750 by 2010. Spending on international
fixed-line
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services
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 remained the lowest throughout the period. It fluctuated slightly, starting at just under $300 in 2001, experiencing a minor rise in the mid-2000s, and ending at around $300 in 2010. In summary,
while
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 national
fixed-line
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expenditure
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 saw a sharp decline,
cell
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phone
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services
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 became increasingly popular, surpassing
fixed-line
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 spending. International
fixed-line
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services
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 remained the least significant in terms of consumer
expenditure
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, cell, phone, services, fixed-line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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