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The line chart below shows the teenage pregnancy rates in selected countries - Australia, Sweden, the United States, and South Africa - from 1985 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the teenage pregnancy rates in selected countries - Australia, Sweden, the United States, and South Africa - from 1985 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates teenage
pregnancy
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rates
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 (per 1,000 girls aged 15-19) in
Australia
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,
Sweden
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, the United States, and South
Africa
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 from 1985 to 2019.
Overall
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, all four countries experienced a decline in teenage
pregnancy
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rates
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, but the United States and South
Africa
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 consistently had the highest figures,
while
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Sweden
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 recorded the lowest throughout the period. In 1985, the United States had the highest rate, exceeding 50 per 1,000 girls, followed by South
Africa
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 at around 45.
In contrast
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,
Australia
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 and
Sweden
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 had significantly lower
rates
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, at approximately 20 and 15, respectively. By 2000, teenage
pregnancy
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 in the U.S. dropped to 40,
however
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, South
Africa
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also
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 saw a moderate decline. Meanwhile,
Australia
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 and
Sweden
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 decreased more gradually, with
Sweden
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 consistently maintaining the lowest figures. By 2019, teen
pregnancy
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rates
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 continued declining, with the U.S. and South
Africa
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 at approximately 30 and 25,
while
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Australia
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 and
Sweden
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 remained lower at 15 and 10 per 1,000, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pregnancy, rates, australia, sweden, africa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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