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The line graph differs the amount of nitrogen oxide by four types of vehicles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The line graph differs the amount of nitrogen oxide by four types of vehicles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how much nitrogen oxide the various vehicles produce.
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the
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lorries and buses release the most emissions
in
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 different
speed
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speeds
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,
while
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 diesel and petrol vehicles are considered to be more
environmentally-friendly
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environmentally friendly
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, releasing less emission
to
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atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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. Both buses and lorries release emissions
in
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a different
level
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levels
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 at different
speed
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speeds
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. Buses, which
releasen
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released
release
releases
 approximately 40 at both 10 and 130 kilometres per hour, exhibit a rapid drop at
faster
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level
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 of driving, reaching
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 lowest point at 60 KPH emitting 26 nitrogen oxide. The trend of vans, starting with 33 grams per kilometre,
decrease
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 in moderate increments to a low of 15 at 90 KPH and
show
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 a marginal increase after that. The remaining 2 car types,
on the other hand
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, represent similar steady trends. The rate for gasoline cars represents a shift, albeit
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small, beginning at 11 and reaching 12 G/KM at 130. Diesel automobiles , after falling slightly, obtain stability at the other speed levels.

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Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emissions
  • nitrogen oxide
  • vehicle types
  • observed period
  • significant increase/decrease
  • emission levels
  • intersections
  • overtakes
  • largest/smallest emitter
  • conclude
  • overall trend
  • emission rankings
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