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Prevention is be!er than cure. Researching and treating disease is costly so it would be be!er to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree?

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There is no denying the fact that preventing a disease is better than curing it.
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 it is a commonly held belief that disease treatments may cost a lot, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that prevention is better than cure.
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 with, research related to curing a disease requires a lot of money, effort, and time.
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, it is a long journey starting from gathering scientific resources and doing numerous experiments to develop a good cure.
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, not all countries can afford
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 an immense cost.
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, African countries like Sudan, Cameroon, and Somalia already have debt, so they can not allocate any part of their budget to
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 sector. Another point to consider is that focusing on preventive measures needs only simple steps. It is possible to say that acquiring a daily routine will help to achieve good health.
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, prevention does not require great expense so both advanced and developing countries can apply these tips.
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, when covid pandemic invaded the world, there was no cure for it. And the only way to survive was through preventive measures,
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 as washing hands, eating food containing vitamins, and
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. In conclusion despite people having different views, I believe that prevention is a significant thing, and all governments should realize its importance. For us, we should include preventive steps in our daily routine, since they can lead us to a healthy life.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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