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The government should allocate more funds to teaching science rather than other subjects for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, education is a major concern among few people.
According to
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 me, authorities have to issue equal funds for teaching every subject.
To begin
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 with, there are various other subjects which are beneficial for society. To explain it, the unemployment rate is now achieving a rapid growth in the society. Because most of the studies are not related to the job vacancies available in their developing areas.
due to
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 that, they are migrating to find a
labor
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labour

The spelling of labor is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs

It seems that job may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 in big cities. Apart, they don't have any business ideas because no one teaches them in their public schools.
Moreover
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, mathematics, geography, sociology, and many more are part of the life of every single person.
Furthermore
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, Every student has their own different interests in each and every course. they do not like to waste their precious time on another course. but if the government puts pressure on teachers to teach mostly science to them.
As a consequence
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, probably most learners leave their schools and start studying at their homes.
Further
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, it causes many problems for the country
such
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 as unemployment and poverty.
To conclude
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, the government should raise equal
fund
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funds

It seems that fund may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 for each course. So that,
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply

The indefinite article a may not be required with the plural noun students in this sentence. Consider removing the article, or changing the noun to singular.

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students can
lean
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learn

The word lean doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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according to
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 their
interest
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interests

It seems that interest may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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. And, Be
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successful

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sucessfull
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successful

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in the future

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task achievement
Make sure to develop your ideas more fully and provide specific examples to support your arguments a bit more clearly. This will strengthen your overall message.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to the flow of your essay. Using connecting words appropriately will help to guide the reader through your ideas and arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and punctuation, particularly in the opening sentence and throughout each paragraph to improve clarity and professionalism.
task achievement
You address a relevant and significant point about education and its impact on society.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay presents a structured approach with identifiable introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
task achievement
You express a clear opinion in your introduction, which sets the stage for your argument.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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