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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nucleat technology for outweight the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nuclear weapons are
threat
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a threat
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 to
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world
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 peace as
it
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they
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poses
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 significant risks. Meanwhile, nuclear powers are a cheat and a clean
energy
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 option. I agree with
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 statement and believe that nuclear
power
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 can be an alternative option.
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, its adverse impacts cannot be underestimated.
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 essay will delve deeper and give my perspective.  Nowadays, the
world
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 is under threat since finite
sources
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resources
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 are contributing negatively to the ecosystem. There are a substantial number of consequences that the
world
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 faces
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 as air contamination,
industrail
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industrial
 fumes, carbon footprint and many
.
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more.
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 By investing in nuclear
energy
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, authorities can reduce these detrimental effects.
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, investments in renewable resources namely solar
energy
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, wind
power
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 etc.,
requires
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 costly implementations. It
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 takes a lot of effort to maintain its utilization. If not cleaned regularly, it can lose its function.
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, nuclear
power
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 is more approachable and
need
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 only little or no effort. Making it a lot more
benefical
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beneficial
 and efficient. The innovation of nuclear weapons revolutionized the way countries interact.
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, they have the potential to come with irreversible results. Nations see these as a
power
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 source
on
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 each other, using it as a political threat.
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, even
an
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 small explosion can be catastrophic for the
world
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.
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, decades ago, a nuclear central exploded and not only harmed the environment but it
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 affected communities. Its
distruption
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disruption
 led to deaths in humans, animal and its radioactive effects
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 caused toxins in the soil. In conclusion, despite its harmful potential usage and negative impacts, if used
proparly
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properly
 it can be
great
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 alternative rather than using limited
energy
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 sources. In my perspective, a shift to
a
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nuclear
energy
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 can shape
the
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biodiversity and the environment positively and governments must
implements
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 stricter regulations about
is
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its
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 reliance.

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task achievement
Work on providing a clearer thesis statement in the introduction that directly reflects your stance on the topic. Consider restating your main argument in the conclusion to reinforce your position.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to logically link your ideas and paragraphs. Transition phrases can help to guide the reader through your argument more smoothly.
task achievement
The essay presents a balanced view, acknowledging both the benefits and drawbacks of nuclear technology.
task achievement
There are relevant examples provided, which help to illustrate your points regarding nuclear energy and weapons.
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