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Band 3

Psychologists have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel. For this reason, attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals. How true is this statement? How far does colour influence people's health and capacity for work? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Colours
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 play
such
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 a huge role in our domestic
lifes
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lives
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. most
of
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the
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apply
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people
believes
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believe
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 it
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colours
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the colours
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 of
place
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the place
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 touch our mood. It is inevitable that it will
also
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 affect how we feel outside of the home
such
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 as hospitals and offices.  I strongly believe that because when I enter somewhere I don't like to feel
boring
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 it
decrease
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decreases
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 my mood. it depends on the
color
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colour
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 of
room
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the room
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. Interestingly,
however
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, there are some office areas that suit bright
colours
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.
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example
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 creative people often say they can carry out their work better if a room is painted in bold
colours
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. In my university in Azerbaijan, our all
classroom
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classrooms
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painted
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are painted
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 in white
colours
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. most of the
times
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time
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 we don't care about it ,
however
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, sometimes we feel bored and we want to see some different
colors
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colours
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 on our class wall.
Second
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 reason is about
colours
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. If
place
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the place
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it
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apply
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is not eye-catching, you can make it beautiful easily.
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hospital
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hospitals
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. Clearly, bright
colours
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 would be less welcome
on
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in
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 a hospital ward, where patients are trying to recover from operations and illnesses. Here, relaxing shades are needed,
such
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 as pastels. The
colors
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colours
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 of a room significantly impact the atmosphere and
overall
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 experience of the space. They can influence mood,
energy
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and energy
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 levels.
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, soft blues and greens tend to create a calm and relaxing environment, making them ideal for
office
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the office
an office
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.

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Grammar
Ensure that all sentences are complete and grammatically correct. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and proper noun forms, such as 'most people believe' instead of 'most of the people believes'.
Structure
Organize paragraphs more effectively, ensuring that each paragraph has a clear main idea and follows logically from the previous one. Use transitional phrases to connect ideas.
Content
Elaborate more on your main points with additional examples or explanations to strengthen your argument. For instance, consider providing more examples of how colors have positively or negatively affected people's experiences in hospitals or offices.
Content
You have presented interesting points about how color influences mood and productivity, which shows awareness of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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