Students at universities often have a choice of place to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in apartments in the community. Compare the advantages of living in university housing with the advantages of living in apartment in the community. Where would you prefer to live? Give reasons for your preference.

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College
students
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might choose to live either in university dorms or apartments around the
neighborhood
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. They may prefer student
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
to save up some money,
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some others think that apartments can give them better privacy and
quiet
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environment. I choose to stay in flats because of the flexibility it provides. The main reason that
make
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dorms very popular is because of the value propositions.
Students
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oftentimes have a limited budget for living and the way they could save some money is to pick the cheapest
accomodation
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accommodation
.
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, there are some sacrifices they need to compromise,
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, noisy rooms and shared facilities.
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many argue
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sacrifice is necessary, others might have different opinions. The idea of sharing a room with strangers might not
appealing
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for
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some
students
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. Some college
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may
also
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prefer
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peaceful surroundings rather than a loudly neighborhood.
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, when we meet a new person from
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area, they usually have different cultures that
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strage
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strange
to us and
contradicts
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to
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our
belief
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.
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could lead to a clash between us and our
roomate
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roommate
, making an apartment life
sounds
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easier than the other. Engineering student
also
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need
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a quiet room for doing their
homeworks
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homework
or projects which is not possible when choosing
live
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to live
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in dorms. For
this
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reasons
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, I believe living in flats or condominiums might do more benefits than
harms
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. In conclusion,
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many individuals prefer to live in university
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
, a flat might
appealing
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appeal
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to some people who need
a
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apply
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more peaceful and
queiter
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quieter
quiet
surroundings.

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You have clearly stated your preference for living in flats and provided a reason for it.
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The contrasting perspectives on university dorms and community apartments were presented well, showing an understanding of both sides.

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