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Band 5

Do you agree that reading newspaper and books will be unuseful in the future? Explain your argument

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Advancements in today's technology are most likely changing people's
behavior
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on
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 aspects of life.
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 of the most debated topic is
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how people would like to read newspapers or
books
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. Some may say that people will shift away from
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conventional printed
books
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 to digitalized
version
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, because it is easier to do so with supporting devices available all around them,
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 smartphones, computers, and tablets.
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, there are bunch of online
contents
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content
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 nowadays that
are
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 accessible for free.
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, it is said that the era of printed
books
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 is over.
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,
personally
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 I beg to differ with
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 opinion. I believe that paper
books
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 will always have
attraction
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 to
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readers at least for three reasons.
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the most basic differences are the sensations we get from the physical
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: the way we turn the paper pages, the smell of either
freshly-printed
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books
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 or old-kept
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, or even reordering the
books
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in
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 the shelf. Those
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kinds
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 of experiences are hard, if not impossible, to obtain from
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 version.
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the quality between
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 inscribed in printed
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books
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 and free online content is different, where the former usually has gone through rigorous efforts of curation and review before
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 getting printed.
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 usually results in deep narratives inscribed.
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, the nature of online content is to be fast-served where actuality is one of its important aspects, leaving it with more shallow information for the readers. Third is the uprising
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 of copyright. Piracy of
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 and other content
often
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 found online that
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 no attribution
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 appreciation for the writers.
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severe
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 impact
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to
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a single-source
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single-source
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 of income.
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,
this
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issue
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 is not only a moral
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,
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 but
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 an economic
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.

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task achievement
Provide a clearer thesis statement in the introduction to explicitly state your position.
coherence and cohesion
In your conclusion, summarize your main points more clearly to reinforce your argument.
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Consider adding more specific examples or anecdotes to enhance your main arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Well-organized paragraphs with distinct main points that support your argument.
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Engaging opening that introduces the topic effectively, leading into a thoughtful discussion.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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