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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compararions where releavant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compararions where releavant.
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The bar chart illustrates the weekly
income
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 spending allocation of households in a country in the period
of
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between
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 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, the proportion of money spent on food, clothing & footwear, and personal goods experienced a downward trend
whereas
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 the spending allocation for housing, transport,
leisure
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and leisure
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 generally increased. The proportion of
income
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 spent by families
for
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on
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 food experienced a dramatic fall from around 35% in 1968 to about 17% in 2018. Similar cases happened for clothing & footwear and personal goods, which fell from around 10% and approximately 8% in 1968 to nearly 5% and just below 4% in 2018, respectively.
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, the percentage of weekly
income
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 spent by households for leisure increased significantly from about 8% in 1968 to over 22% in 2018.
While
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 the percentage of weekly
income
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 utilized for household goods remained unchanged in the observed period, families increased their allocation for housing and transportation as it is evident that the proportion of
income
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 they utilized for housing and transportation soared dramatically from around 10% and about 7% in 1968 to approximately 18% and close to 14% in 2018, respectively

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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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