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The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country
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The graph provides a breakdown of
films
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 released and
ticket
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sales
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 among four distinct genres ( Drama,Comedy,Fantasy and Romance) in 1996 and 2006.
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, a noticeable escalation in the number of
films
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 introduced and cinema tickets sold is evident across the two periods,the proportion of Drama,Comedy and Fantasy
films
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 in 2000 was higher than in 1996.Interestingly, the rate of Romance
films
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 being produced remained unchanged. Drama
films
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 witnessed a significant growth of around 25% in 1996 to a peak of 35% in 2006,
along with
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 a significant percentage of
ticket
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sales
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 of over 15%.
In contrast
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,the proportion of Comedy movies saw a remarkable increase,reaching 25% in 2006,
although
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 their
ticket
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sales
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 picked up at least 25% during the same year. The market share of fantasy
films
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 exceeded 15 % by 2006, with the corresponding share of
ticket
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sales
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 being approximately 7%.
On the other hand
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,the release of romance
films
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 remained steady at slightly above 5% in both years.
Also
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,
sales
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 of
this
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 film were unchanged in both periods.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words films, ticket, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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