Some people say that the government should spend more money taking care of elderly people while others think that government spending should be spent more on the education of young people. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, Some pupil argues that public

authories

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authorities

authorises

need to spend more funds on

older

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the older

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generation.

However

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, opponents are saying they should spend on

youngsters

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youngsters'

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education, and

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will discuss both viewpoints with my

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personal

opinion in

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paragraphs.

To begin

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with, first and the foremost reason behind spending on elders is experience. To extend it,

olders

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older

have more life experiences

comapretively

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comparatively

youngsters. So they can teach new skills, life lessons and consequences to the

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youngsters

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Secondly

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unemployment

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the unemployment

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rate

faced

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significant growth in the world, generally if

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the goverment

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goverment

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government

governments

invest

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on takecaring of elder

peoples

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people

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then

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its a good chance of employment for other

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people

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grammatical accuracy

Ensure complete sentences are used and check for grammatical accuracy to improve clarity.

depth of explanation

Expand on the arguments presented; each viewpoint needs more depth and explanation, particularly with examples.

structure

The essay presents both sides of the argument clearly, which is a good approach for a discussion type of essay.

clarity

The introduction effectively outlines the topic and indicates that both viewpoints will be discussed.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

104 words

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Some people say that the government should spend more money taking care of elderly people while others think that government spending should be spent more on the education of young people. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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