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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Beka

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Beka
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The charts illustrate changes in household
ownership
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 of electrical appliances and the time spent on housework per week in a country from 1920 to 2019. The first chart tracks the adoption of washing machines,
refrigerators
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, and
vacuum
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cleaners
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,
while
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 the second chart shows the decline in household chores.
Overall
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,
ownership
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 of all three appliances increased significantly, with
refrigerators
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 and
vacuum
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cleaners
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 reaching nearly 100%. Meanwhile, the number of hours spent on housework dropped consistently, indicating a strong correlation between appliance adoption and reduced domestic labour. In 1920, only 30% of households had
vacuum
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cleaners
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,
while
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 washing machines were slightly more common at 40%.
Refrigerators
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 were almost nonexistent. By 1980,
refrigerators
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became
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 nearly universal, followed by
vacuum
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cleaners
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 in 2000. Washing machine
ownership
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also
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 grew but at a slower pace. Housework hours declined from 50 per week in 1920 to just 10 in 2019. The sharpest drop occurred between 1920 and 1960, coinciding with increased appliance
ownership
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. After 1980, the decline slowed as appliance adoption neared saturation.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ownership, refrigerators, vacuum, cleaners with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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