the chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. the tabel shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years.

the chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. the tabel shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. the tabel shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years.
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The chart illustrates the number of Anthropology graduates from one institution who did after their
under-bachelor
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undergraduate
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degree courses. And other table depicts the payment of the Anthropologists in
work
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after five works.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the graph the number of students involved in full-time
work
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.
In contrast
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, the lowest number of students did part-time
work
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+ postgrad study. Full-time
work
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had 52%
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nest highest proportion was part-time
work
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which was
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15%.
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12%
students
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of students
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have
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are
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unemployed. There was more fluctuation occurred in Full-time postgrad study, part-time
work
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+ postgrad study and not know, it was 8%, 5% and 8%.
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, the salaries of Anthropology graduates after 5 years’
work
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so there more fluctuation occurred in among three types of employments.
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, Freelance consultation was the highest in the payment it was
around25,000
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around 25,000
- 49,999 to 100,000+.
Government
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The government
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sector rose by 25,000- 49,999
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increased up to 50%.
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, private companies started with 10% it went up 30%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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