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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

1. Some say that todays life is better than it will be in the future; others disagree and say that in the future life will be better than now. Discuss, and include your own opinion

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In my opinion, I will go with option 1 for sure. If we consider global warming, deforestation, and high pollution rate, it is easy to say that today's life is better than it will be in future. Continiously, people on earth are having more damage to
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 day after day. Human beings are consistently destroying all of
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 and it ends with global warming and an increase in pollution rate. Since mother
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 is crucial for life, it is
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, future life will be more easy considering nowadays. The main reason for
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technology. We are building nuclear reactors, and higher buildings
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 destroying
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 in parallel. In conclusion, our days on Earth are priceless.
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, human beings need to take care of what they have.

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Make sure each paragraph has a clear focus and topic sentence to guide the reader. Consider restructuring your paragraphs for better flow.
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It's important to ensure that your arguments are fully developed with more specific examples and explanations to enhance clarity.
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Your essay presents a clear opinion and is structured with an introduction and conclusion.
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You raise relevant issues such as global warming and technological advancement, which are timely topics of discussion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • automation
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • medical breakthroughs
  • quality of life
  • environmental challenges
  • climate change
  • resource depletion
  • global connectivity
  • cultural understanding
  • global problems
  • international cooperation
  • political instability
  • optimism
  • inequality
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