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Band 4.5

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

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These days, some
people
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 hold the view that
people
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 should leave the
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place to
place
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work
 which they
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get
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 some training
such
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 as doctors, engineers and more. But others believe that
people
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 can
work
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 in the place where they want to go.
This
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 topic is so popular and common all over the world. In my opinion, I agree with the latter one. On the one hand, if
people
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 choose another nation to get a job, they can open their minds and expand their
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. It is because it is a little challenge that
people
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 enter a new
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surroundings
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. They have to meet
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come
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who come
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 from
diffierent
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different
 backgrounds. As far as we all know, in
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 process,
people
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 can improve their abilities,
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 as problem-solving skills, teamwork abilities
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communication skills and more. In
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addition
, it is
also
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 a good method to develop their
self-steem
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self-esteem
, they can talk
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about problems
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 with
people
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 from all walks of life.
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,
people
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 working in a familiar environment can help them improve their
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 focus. They can not be disturbed by the new surroundings, they can finish more jobs at
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the
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 same time.Meanwhile, they have mastered Chinese and have their own social network in China,
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this
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which
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 can help them save a lot of time. In my opinion,
people
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 should be encouraged to have
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expercience
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experience
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work
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working
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at
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apply
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abroad. It is because it is a good way to challenge and improve themselves, meanwhile
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 something new that they did not notice before to make their knowledge system better and better. In conclusion.
people
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 can
work
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 in another country if they want,
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, they should be encouraged to return back their nation in the future,
they
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and they
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 should use the knowledge that they learn in another country to make sure the motherland
develop
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develops
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 better and
bettet
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better
.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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