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The chart below shows the number of men and women (in thousand) in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women (in thousand) in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart below illustrates the amount
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 thousands of
female
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females
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male
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males
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 in
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modern
education
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 in Britain in both terms of full and
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part
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time
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education
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 by three
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period
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.
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a meal
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meal
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 as a
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time
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education
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 had fallen down significantly over the years, on the other side as a
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education
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 meal had an increase.likely,
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 as a
full
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time
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education
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 faced a growth by thousands and
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time
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education
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 . In 1970 ,the cost by thousands as a
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education
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 for males
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 1000thousand which
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 the highest point
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 males during the period. And it faced a
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decline
 around 800 in both years 1980 and 1991.
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 the chart shows a growth from 1970 to 1991
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 approximately 400.
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,
female
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females
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 as a
full
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full-time
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time
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education
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formed
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a
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rose reaching
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almost 400 in 1990 .
Also
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part-time
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part
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part-time
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time
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education
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 it had an increase up to almost 1200 by 1990

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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, part, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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