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Some people believe that planing for the future is a waste of time because they think that focusing on the present is more important. To what extent do you agree or disagree. Angsa

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It is argued that focusing on the present rather than planning for the future is more important and a waste of time. I disagree with the above statement and will explain my viewpoints in the following paragraphs with relevant examples. People who plan have bright futures. Not only do they make strategies to acquire the required goals, but they
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 achieve success in their long-term visions.
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, their disciplined schedules do not let them be distracted from remaining tasks every
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, and completing things on time always makes them feel free from undesirable chaos, stress, and anxiety.
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, students with a timetable have more idea of where to go in the syllabus, and, which subject has to choose for good marks in studies, as they know their main motive.
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, tutees with no career orientation cannot even think more than class notes.
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, it becomes havoc for them. That's why planning for the future is not only necessary for elders but
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 for youngsters.
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, a proactive approach for coming times gives clarity and focus and enhances the productivity of work, which leads to better results. The biggest example of soldiers, who wake up with the scheduled alarm, have breakfast, and lunch, and run the
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 with planned duties, end the
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 with dinner on time. These habits keep them active throughout the
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 they
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 win the race when it comes to war between nations.
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, having
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planning
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 for
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the future
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 will let people acquire
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 vision,
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, focusing on presence will just keep them in present.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to improve clarity in your arguments by using clearer topic sentences in each paragraph. This will help guide the reader through your ideas more effectively.
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In your conclusion, try to summarize your main points more explicitly instead of introducing new concepts. This will enhance the overall effectiveness of your conclusion.
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Ensure that your examples directly relate to the arguments you make. This strengthens your points and provides a more compelling case.
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Your essay presents a clear disagreement with the prompt, which is a strong aspect of your task response.
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You provide specific examples, such as students with a timetable and soldiers, which adds depth to your arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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