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Band 5

You recently moved to a new city for study and are experiencing some difficulties settling in. Write a letter to your friend describing your situation. In your letter, you should: Explain why you moved to the new city. Describe the challenges you are facing. Ask for their advice on how to adjust better to your new environment.

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Dear Tom, I hope
this
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 letter finds you in radiant
healath
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health
. I'm just writing
this
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 letter to tell you about some things that I facing in
London
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. As you know, I participated in
college
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the college
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 entrance exam
last
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 month, but unfortunately, I
didn't
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wasn't
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 eligible
for going
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to go
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 to college in Everton .
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, I had to go to college in another
city
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. I
chosen
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chose
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London
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, as it was close to Everton and I could easily visit my family.
London
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 is
beautiful
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a beautiful
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city
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, which is truly an enchanting place, but I have some challenges here.
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,
this
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city
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 is incredibly expensive,
which
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and
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 I can barely manage my expenses.
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, the cost of a meal in
normal
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a normal
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 restaurant is twice as much as in our
city
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.
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,
London
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's weather is usually cloudy and you
could
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 see the sun just once a week.
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, I don't have any
friend
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friends
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 in
this
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city
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. It's very difficult for me to communicate with new people, which
cause
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causes
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I
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me
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 am always be alone here. I really don't know how can assimilate myself to
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city
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. what's your opinion about
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 problem? Do you think I should continue my study in
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city
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 or stop? I really appreciate your time and consideration. Please write to me as soon as possible. Best regards, Sadra Majidi.

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grammar
Make sure to check grammar and spelling, as these small errors can affect the overall impression of your writing.
content
Try to develop your ideas a little more, especially about how you feel in the new city and what specific things you miss from your previous home.
tone
Your letter has a friendly tone, which is appropriate for a letter to a friend.
task response
You clearly explained your reasons for moving, which helped to fulfill the task requirements.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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