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The charts below show the proportion of holidaymakers using four different types of accommodation in three different years

The charts below show the proportion of holidaymakers using four different types of accommodation in three different years
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The pie charts show the
proportion
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 of
holidaymakers
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 using four different apartments that include: staying with family, renting an
apartment
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, camping and
hotels
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 in the ten-year interval, from 1988 to 2008
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, it is clear from the charts that over a
period
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 of three decades staying with family was the popular choice of lots of
holidaymakers
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 in all three decades,
while
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 the
proportion
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 of renting an
apartment
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 increased over time. Meanwhile camping and staying at
hotels
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 faced some fluctuations in a given
period
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. In 1988 the first most popular choice was staying with family, with just over half the
proportion
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 of
holidaymakers
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 (52%). Camping was the second choice of people as an accommodation (26%). Accommodations with the lowest proportions of choices were Renting an
apartment
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 and
Hotels
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 at 15% and 7%, respectively. Over a
period
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 of two intervals (1998-2008) Staying with family declined from 54%
proportion
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 in 1998 to 44% in 2008. The number of
holidaymakers
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 staying in
hotels
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 and renting an
apartment
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 increased from 15% to 22% and from 7% to 11%, respectively in 1998. In 2008 staying at
hotels
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 remained stable,
while
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 renting apartments increased by half (22%).
This
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 is in stock contrast to Camping, which decreased by 14% from 26% to 12% over a
period
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 of ten years interval

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, holidaymakers, apartment, hotels, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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