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working in big company is better than working in small company, to what extnt you agree with this statment

Nowadays, It
is often argue
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 that working in
huge
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a huge
the huge
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company
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 is better than working in
startup
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a startup
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company
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 and if it is useful or not.
An
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In an
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 army
pepole
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people
 see that working in
big
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a big
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company
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 has more
benifts
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benefits
.
while
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 in
oppesing
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opposing
 view many
people
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 see that no matter if we
work
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 with small
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comany
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company
.
In
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this
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 essay will discuss both
view
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views
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. To be frank plethora
individuals
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of individuals
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 see big
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company
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companies
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 give many
oppartinity
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opportunities
 and
featuers
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features
 to
employee
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employees
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. To start with
first
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the first
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 reason, folks who
work
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 in big
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comany
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companies
has
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have
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 good
salery
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salaries
. so they feel
relax
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relaxed
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 they can do many things
their
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there
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. For
exampls
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example
,
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they bulid
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bulid
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build
 big
house
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houses
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, buy luxury cars,
teach
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and teach
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 their
childern
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children
 in
intrnational
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international
school
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schools
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.
Furthermore
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, many
people
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 who
work
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 in great
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comany
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company
 they learning fastly. So
people
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has
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have
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 lots of
chance
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chances
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.
For instance
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, they take training high
quaility
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quality
also
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 they meet in their job
people
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 has an
experince
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experience
 so they learn from it.
Although
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 they have
this
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oppertinity
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opportunity
 they develop in their job fastly.
For example
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, one of our family
member
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members
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work
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works
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 in
bank
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Bank
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 Muscut, he start as
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a normall
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normall
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normal
normally
 employee
after
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and after
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 two
year
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years
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 he become
maneger
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manager
.
Nonetheless
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,
an
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apply
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army individuals see
that
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apply
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working in
mimi
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a mimi
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comany
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company
better
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as better
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 than
they
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working
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work
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 in high
quilty
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high-quality
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comany
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company
.
firstly
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 they have a
relax
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relaxing
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 place to
work
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. they
work
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 in
calm
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a calm
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 place, there is no huge number of
employee
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employees
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 there.
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also
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also,
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 you can get your own room
their
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there
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 to
work
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 in peace.
such
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 as
, university
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the University
 of Nizwa
show
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shows
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 in his studies that 79% of
freash
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Freash
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graduate
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graduates
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, prefer working in
startup
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a startup
the startup
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company
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.
In addition
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, you can get
job
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a job
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their
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there
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 easily so, just
you
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apply
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show them your
siklls
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skills
 in
part
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the part
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 that you
work
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 in.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 you do not
neeed
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need
 a certification, they just want you to see your ability and how you
work
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.
To sum up
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. I
am
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apply
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totaly agree with
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the statment
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statment
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statement
 that working in
big
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a big
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comany
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company
 is better because if I can get the
experince
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experience
 from the oppertinity that
give
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is given
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as
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to
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 and i
canopen
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will open
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 my own
company
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 because
i
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I
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 will have
chance
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a chance
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 to get
high
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a high
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salery
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salary
.

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Task Achievement
Your introduction could be clearer. Try to rephrase the statement to make it more concise and make sure to clearly state your position.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to maintain a consistent logical flow between your paragraphs. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea that supports your overall argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Check for spelling and grammatical errors, as these can make understanding your points more difficult. Taking the time to proofread can improve your score.
Task Achievement
You have provided valid points for both sides of the argument, which shows a good understanding of the topic.
Task Achievement
Your examples are relevant to your points and help to illustrate your arguments effectively.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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