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working in a big company is better than working in a small company. to what extant do you agree

Nowadays, It is often argued that working in a huge
company
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 is better than working in a startup club and
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 it is useful or not. In an
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people
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 see that working in a big
company
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 has more benefits.
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 in opposing view many
people
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 see that no matter if we
work
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 with
small
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a small
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company
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.
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Thus this
 essay will discuss both views. To be frank plethora of individuals see big companies give many opportunities and features to employees. To start with the first reason, folks who
work
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 in big companies have good salaries. so they feel relaxed they can do many things there.
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, build big houses, buy luxury cars, and teach their children in international schools.
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, many
people
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 who
work
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 in
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company
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 they learning fastly. So
people
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 have lots of chances.
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, they take training high quality
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 they meet in their job
people
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has
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 an experience so they learn from it.
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 they have
this
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 opportunity they develop in their job fastly.
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, one of our family members works in Bank Muscut, he
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 as
normal
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a normal
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 employee and after two years he
become
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becomes
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manager
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a manager
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.
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, army individuals see working in
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the mini
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company
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 as better than working effort in
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 high-quality
company
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.
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 they have a relaxing place to
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. they
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 in a calm place, there is no huge number of employees there.
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, you can get your own room there to
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 in peace.
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 as the University of Nizwa shows in his studies that 79% of
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Fresh
 graduates, prefer working in a startup
company
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.
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, you can get a job there easily so, just show them your skills in the part that you
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 in.
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, you do not need a certification, they just want you to see your ability and how you
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.
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. I
totaly
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totally
 agree with
statement
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the statement
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 that working in a big
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 is better because if I can get the experience from the
oppertinity
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opportunity
that is
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 given to
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i
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 will open my own
company
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 because
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 will have a chance to get a high salary.

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coherence and cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more clearly. Ensure each paragraph covers a single main point that supports your overall argument.
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Try to improve the clarity of your sentences and reduce grammatical errors. This will enhance your overall communication.
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Make sure to elaborate more on your points and provide specific examples that directly relate to your argument.
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You addressed both sides of the argument, which demonstrates an understanding of the topic.
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You provided relevant examples, especially in the context of salary and job satisfaction.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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