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Some people think that to have a successful career it is important to continue studies. However, some believe that the key to prosperous career is to get experience rather than academic education. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It has often
said
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 that gaining skills and
experience
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 plays a crucial role in career
sucess
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success
 meanwhile others hold the
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 view that pursuing
study
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along with
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job
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a job
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 has powerful impacts on shaping the future. I believe that a balance between
work
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 and
study
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both
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apply
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can help in succeeding in any
field
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. To start with, for
an
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 qualified
position
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,
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requirment
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requirement
 of years of expertise
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particular
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field
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 as per the
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work related
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 demands is mandatory.
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, people tend to volunteer in some particular jobs for years to master the skills required in that
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. At numerous workplaces, there
always
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a
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virtual training and
then
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 practical skills which benefit
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individuals
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 in
overall
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 growth. The major reason is workplace safety,
for
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example
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 senior workers are less likely to get injured than
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the youth
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 workforce because
experience
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 in any
position
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 helps
person
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a person
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 to get
the depth
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in-depth
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 knowledge of everything to avoid
work
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-related injuries and they tend to
achive
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achieve
more
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higher level
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 opportunities.
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 opponents claim that
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study
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studying
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along with
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job
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a job
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 is much
beneficial
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 for
a
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apply
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standard success.
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 learning of the subject helps people to excel in specific tasks.
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, there are some
of
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the
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job
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position
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 which requires
university level
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university-level
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study
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 to hire
the
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apply
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employee
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employees
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 where they do not ask for
previors
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previous
work
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experience
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. So, having academic knowledge can
benefits
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 to master like for a lawyer, the requirements are law degrees, not
work
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experience
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 and in
this
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field
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 a person always
learn
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simutaneouly
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simultaneously
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 their
job
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 to get
the
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 better view. Henceforth, It
also
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 depends on various
job
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position
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 as well. As
,
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apply
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 some of them
requires
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 only
theortical
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theoretical
 knowledge without any previous
experince
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experience
 and others
requires
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 only years of expertise to
work
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 in
specific
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a specific
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field
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which
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apply
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I
also
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 believe that
experience
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 plays a vital role in
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a person
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person
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 success.

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task achievement
Ensure to include a clear thesis statement that outlines your main argument in the introduction.
coherence
Try to use linking words to enhance the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
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Make sure to elaborate on examples with more details to strengthen your argument.
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You presented both sides of the argument, showcasing a balanced view.
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Some examples provided were relevant and highlighted real-world applications of education and experience.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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