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Band 3

More and more people are using computers and electric devices to access information, therefore there is no need to print books, magazines and newspapers on paper. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, technological gadgets are popular among
people
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 for gathering
information
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,
however
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,
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it is
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 not useful to print books or magazines on paper. I partially agree with
this
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 statement. Undoubtedly, technical science faced significant development in the past few years, which gave various advantages to the common
people
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 by introducing various apps and sites through which a person can find each and every
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information
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piece of information
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 in just a few seconds without any trouble.
Apart from
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this
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, it's a good source for some
people
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 who are not able to read; as a solution, there are various options on the internet that can help a user to find out any answer through the help of audio or video, which makes it popular among
people
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.
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, printing material is a reliable option for individuals, as readers can use it anywhere in the world. without any trouble. in some underdeveloped areas, the government fails to provide good internet services, so in those
areas
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people
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 are fully dependent on newspapers to get everyday news or other essential
information
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.
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, printed stuff is playing a crucial role in schools for those students who are facing problems at making
concentration
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concentrating
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 on their studies,
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, technical gadgets are
the
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a
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 good source
to find
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for finding
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out
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apply
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the
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apply
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information
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 rapidly but in in some developing areas
people
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 are not in favour of technology
because of
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for
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their
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apply
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various reasons.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more clearly. For example, use phrases like 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', or 'On the other hand' to improve the flow of your writing.
Task Achievement
Ensure that every point made in your essay is fully developed. Expand on your ideas with more detailed examples or explanations to strengthen your argument.
Grammar
Avoid minor grammatical errors, like subject-verb agreement ('its' should be 'it's') and punctuation issues, to enhance the readability of your essay.
Task Achievement
You have presented a balanced view by acknowledging both sides of the argument, which adds depth to your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction clearly states your position on the topic, which is important for setting the context.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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