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Band 3.5

Traffic congestion is a growing problem in many cities today. What of the causes of traffic congestion and what measures can be taken to reduce it?

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Traffic
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jums
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jams
 have become the number one concern of
society
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who
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living in the largest cities. most individuals are looking for the answer
of
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 "why
this
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 case is
incerasing
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increasing
 in recent years?".
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, what solution
that
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should we
do
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take
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 to minimize it
.
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This
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 essay will explain
about
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that. In my opinion,
traffic
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 congestion has been happening for a long time.
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,
this
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 problem not only
occurated
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occurred
curated
 in big cities
,
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 but
also
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 has begun in small towns. In
this
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 era,
i
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 saw the
fenomena
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phenomena
 that
i
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 called "one home, many vehicles",
specially
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 in my hometown. It is probably because the population
is always enhance
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 their transportation.
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,
the
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traffic
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 jams usually
happens
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 in
the
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rush hour, like; in the morning when the
society
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 will go to the office,
then
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 in the evening when they want to back home.
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, congestion can
happens
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 if any festival with parking area along the roadside.
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,
the
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 solution to reduce
this
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fenomena
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phenomena
 is needed. So, we must realize that
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this
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these
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 jams should have a collaboration between the
goverment
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government
 and
society
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 to
measures
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 it.
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, the state already
have
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has
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 methods to minimize the
traffic
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 jams problem.
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, public transportation is already available
is
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in
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 various cities and some areas have already implemented the odd-even
traffic
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 rule.
Depens
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 on me when
i
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went
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 to the city with
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traffic
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the traffic
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rule
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, it
is
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successfull
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successful
.
Overall
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, the causes of
traffic
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 congestion can
be decrease
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 if the
society
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 and
goverment
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government
working
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work
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 together to overcome it.

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task achievement
Improve the introduction by clearly stating your stance and outlining the main points you will discuss in your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure your sentences are grammatically correct and pay attention to spelling throughout your essay.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and details for your main points to strengthen your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Clarify transitions between ideas to improve the flow of the essay; use transitional words like 'furthermore', 'in addition', or 'however' to connect ideas more smoothly.
task achievement
You addressed the topic by discussing both causes and solutions of traffic congestion, showing awareness of the prompt.
coherence and cohesion
Your informal style makes your essay engaging and relatable.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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