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Some people believe that information available in the internet will end the era of newspapers and magazines. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion with examples.

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In
this
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 new era,
the
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technology dramatically rapid can
change
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dramatically change
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 the world and our
life living
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lives
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. Owing to
this
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, it has become much easier to get
a
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news
a piece of news
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news
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 in a
minutes
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minute
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 on social media.
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, most
of
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the
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people
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 started to think
this
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 situation
it
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will
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would
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 to the end era of
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and magazines. In
this
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 essay,
i
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I
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 will discuss my opinion and give some examples in
this
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 following essay.
To begin
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 with,
internet
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the internet
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 is fast
growth
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growing
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 rate in the world, we can easily read the latest
news
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 on our phone or tablet anytime without paying any extra fees
on
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for
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 the material.
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, most
of
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apply
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the specialist
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specialist
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specialists
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 read
the
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climate change or crime
news
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 on the computer or
labtop
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laptop
while
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their
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they're
they are
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 sitting in the tram or
waiting
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waiting for
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 the bus going to work.
Also
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, local communities can post the
news
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 on
the
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social media like Facebook or
instragram
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Instagram
 to let their neighbours know the latest information around the area where
their
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they
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lives
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live
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. Because of
this
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,
people
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 will stop buying the material in the bookshop as it will
pricey
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be pricey
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 and
it
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not handy as we
need
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need to
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 carry or hold by hand.
On the other hand
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,
although
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 the internet will save us
alot
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a lot
 of time and received the latest information
but
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apply
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people
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 always
looks
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look
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 at
the
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their
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smartphone
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smartphones
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instead
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 of
read
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reading
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the
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a
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 book. It will
cause
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 our
eye
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eyes
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become
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to become
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 dry and
fatigue
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fatigued
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because
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because of
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 the radiation of technology.
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, parents
are always check
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always check
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 the
news
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 on
the
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their
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labtop
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laptop
it
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which
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 will
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cause
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causes
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 the children
have
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to have
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distict
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distinct
district
 and not
close
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be close
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with
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to
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 their family at home.
Also
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,
although
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 the internet
save
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saves
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 us
the
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apply
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times
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time
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but
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apply
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it will
cause
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 the sales of the shop will dramatically drop and
umemploment
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increase
.
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,
people
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 will not
buying
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buy
be buying
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 the book and some old
schools
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school
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 person will be upset. In conclusion,
i
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I
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 believe
although
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 the world can change rapidly because the technology
and
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apply
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it will
cause
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the
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apply
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unemployment.

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines your position on the topic. Clearly define your stance on whether you agree or disagree with the statement.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the supporting details logically follow from that. This will help enhance the overall flow of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Consider using linking words and phrases to connect sentences and paragraphs more smoothly, which will improve the coherence of your essay.
task achievement
Some examples provided lack clarity and relevance. Ensure that you provide specific examples that directly support your argument.
task achievement
You have a clear position on the topic and express your opinion throughout the essay, which is important for task achievement.
task achievement
You attempt to provide examples, which is a good approach to support your arguments.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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