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Too much empasis placed on testing these days. The need to prepare for tests and examination is a restriction on teachers and also exerts unnecessary pressure on young learners. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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Educational
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The educational
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 system requires lots of
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different
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 consumed. There are various ways how to explain
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 or that topic based on a student's educational
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, they pay
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attention
 not just to the curriculum, but
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 topic more convenient for learning.
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the
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 in assessment methods, the major way to check academic performance is well-known standardized tests. The educational pressure
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 us change our
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 each test requires that
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 have to focus on holistic learning. It belongs to reducing the sleeping time, the ability to
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 skills and
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psychological
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 getting worth. People could have a headache,
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 hand,
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 in
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 have a good motivation to learn – they start to attend lots of seminars using
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student
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 endless education without
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restrictive
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 practice makes their body
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exhausted
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 become more
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aggressive
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 control themselves
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 high-stakes testing,
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and stress
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 based on
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the unability
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unability
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inability
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prepared
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 no magic in knowing all for one day and
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 deleting huge
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amount
amounts
 of data from the brain. As for me,
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the educational
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 system should be updated. We should refuse the
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exhausted
 educational system.
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Instead
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that
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it could be better to involve
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 in project-based
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learning
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. You could judge the
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knowledge
 by results in practice, not
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hipotetically
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hypothetically
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aproach
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approach
 could decrease the value of
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psychological devices
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 learning in
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the mind
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mind
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minds
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 of
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task achievement
The introduction does not clearly state your position on the topic. A more direct thesis statement would help clarify your stance on testing in education.
coherence and cohesion
Some paragraphs lack clear topic sentences, making it harder for the reader to follow your main ideas. Ensure each paragraph starts with a concise topic sentence that outlines the point you will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
There are several spelling and grammatical errors that can distract the reader. Proofreading your work before submission could help eliminate these issues. Consider focusing on areas like 'diferent' to 'different', 'attantion' to 'attention', and 'exchousted' to 'exhausted' for better clarity.
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Adding specific examples to support your ideas could strengthen your arguments. For example, referencing studies or providing statistics on student stress levels associated with testing would enhance your essay.
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You highlight the psychological effects of educational pressure very effectively, showing a good understanding of the challenges students face.
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Your points related to the need for project-based learning as an alternative assessment method demonstrate forward-thinking and innovation in education.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • high-stakes testing
  • standardized tests
  • curriculum
  • teacher autonomy
  • psychological effects
  • student well-being
  • assessment methods
  • project-based learning
  • continuous assessment
  • holistic learning
  • educational pressure
  • creativity in teaching
  • motivation to learn
  • restrictive practices
  • education systems
  • academic performance
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