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A friend of yours is going on holiday soon and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: recommend a good place for a holiday that you have visited describe where you stayed and what you can do there give one negative aspect about the destination (204)

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Dear sandy, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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 letter to recommend a great tourist destination for your summer holidays
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that
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which
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 is Las Vegas. It has
lot
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a lot
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 of tourist attractions including vibrant beaches, massive shopping malls and casinos. Most importantly, people are well-mannered and generous. I visited Las Vegas
last
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 year for a conference.
Moreover
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,
i
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I
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 thoroughly enjoyed the tour and visited every tourist
places
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place
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. I
was stayed
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stayed
have stayed
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 with my colleagues in '
Dixon
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The Dixon
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hotel
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Hotel
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'
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that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 is rated five stars. It has all the amenities including
swimming
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a swimming
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 pool, gym and indoor play area. I hope you enjoy the swimming session because I know how much you like to swim. One thing which
i
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I
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dont
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don't
 like is the weather because it
was
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is
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 hot in summer but with some protective garments and suncream
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,
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it won't bother you. I highly recommend
this
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 place to visit. With love, Santhoshkumar

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coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your letter into clearer sections. For example, you can introduce the destination first, followed by details about your experience, and then conclude with any negatives and your recommendation.
task achievement
Make sure to maintain consistent verb tenses and correct any spelling errors, like 'i' should be 'I' and 'dont' should be 'don't'. This will enhance the professionalism of your writing.
task achievement
You've successfully recommended a specific destination and included personal experience, which adds authenticity to your writing.
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The overall tone of your letter is friendly and inviting, which is appropriate for the context of writing to a friend.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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