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The line graph illustrates the number of disturbances conveyed to Enviromental Health officer about noise in Newtown from 1980 to 1996.

The line graph illustrates the number of disturbances conveyed to Enviromental Health officer about noise in Newtown from 1980 to 1996.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
noise
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complaints
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 reported to the Environmental Health Officer in Newtown from 1980 to 1996. The
complaints
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 were categorized into four sources: road works, factory
noise
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,
traffic
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noise
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, and domestic/
household
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noise
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.
Overall
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, domestic/
household
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noise
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 had the highest
number
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 of
complaints
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 by the end of the period,
whereas
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 road works showed a steady decline and had the lowest
number
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 of
complaints
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 in 1996. In 1980,
complaints
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 about road works were the highest, with just over 600 reports.
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,
this
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number
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 declined sharply over the years, reaching under 100
complaints
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 in 1996.
In contrast
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,
complaints
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 related to factory
noise
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 increased gradually, peaking at 700 in 1988. After that, the
number
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 remained relatively stable with a slight decline.
Traffic
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noise
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 and domestic/
household
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noise
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 followed a similar trend between 1980 and 1988.
Initially
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,
traffic
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noise
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 accounted for around 300
complaints
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,
while
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 domestic/
household
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noise
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 had 500.
However
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, after 1988, domestic
noise
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complaints
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 surged significantly, reaching approximately 1,200 in 1996.
This
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 was the highest recorded figure among all categories. Meanwhile,
traffic
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noise
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complaints
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 increased at a slower pace, reaching around 600 by the end of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, noise, complaints, traffic, household with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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